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Lay down, silly little boy
Close your eyes, foolish child
Did you really feel special?
Did you truly think, you were different?

Stand up, silly little toy
Open your eyes, troublesome gnat
Look into the shattered mirror
Watch the salty rain run wild

Do you see silly, little, tool?
With your hideous eyes, stupid kid
Your worth has burnt in fire
See the pathetic pile of ash?

Such a smart, silly, little brat
Such an understanding, foolish, rat
You can see your end is near
Why not speed things up;

Silly, little, boy?
This is a very deep poem I wrote today that hurt me to write. I tired hard on this but not really sure how it turned on.. Hope you like
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NaokoElric2250 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really do fell like a child while reading this.
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Student Writer
Why is that, and is that a bad or good thing?
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NaokoElric2250 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, it is a good thing, as you are invoking emotion. And well, it just reminds you of what some parents think about the thoughts or opinions of children. Thought, now I'm guessing it's a metaphor?
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
Ohhh, okay, thank makes since
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:iconnaokoelric2250:
NaokoElric2250 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Is that good?
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Student Writer
Yes, I think so
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StellaStarfish Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student General Artist
This is so sad but at the same time so lovely... :heart:
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you <3
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anila73 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. The uncomfortable effect of this poem tainted with insanity is powerful. Love it.
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you, I put a lot of power into this one and am glad it showed
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Kori20 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013
I love it
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Student Writer
Im glad you do :)
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commissar-pijjin Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student Writer
this is a bit unnerving 

i like it
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:iconthelonelywolf678:
thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Student Writer
How? And thank you
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WhiteHeartFlame Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, wow.  This was written wonderfully, though it made me sad.  I really like it, though.  Nicely done!
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you for that! Im sorry it made you sad, but at the same time it makes me happy to be able to touch others with what ive written
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WhiteHeartFlame Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!  And don't be sorry!  To invoke emotion into the reader is what writers strive to do.  You did wonderfully with this piece.  ^^
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Student Writer
It really is, and thank you for that. It feels great to have people say things like this! :D
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WhiteHeartFlame Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It was my pleasure.  You deserve it.  :D
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tulf42 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
it was good, shocking but good!
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! But shocking how?
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tulf42 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
shocking how I was trying to picture it who was the person saying this poem to the silly little boy...
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Student Writer
Well who do you imagine that person to be?
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:icontulf42:
tulf42 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
either a parent or an older sister. mainly the older sister because my sister recently annoyed me and has no respect for me anymore.
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student Writer
Why is that?
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tulf42 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
because she's trying so hard to get a job. I have a job but it'll soon be finished (because it's seasonal work) and so my sister will be annoyed that I'm at home (she likes some privacy)
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Student Writer
Really? What do you do as your job? And so she treats you bad for it?
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AJ-Dion Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
It's really good.  I like it.  :D (Big Grin)
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks so much :)
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SparkleFairyMangoFsh Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student General Artist
it came out really well!!
;-;  aw, don't be hurt!! :hug:
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! and thanks for the hug :) I try to not let it get to me, but sometimes, it just happens :/
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SparkleFairyMangoFsh Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student General Artist
We all have ups and downs ^^
as much as it can hurt to express it, it can help in the long run as well
I hope things go better for you :huggle:
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thelonelywolf678 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you for that :huggle:
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SparkleFairyMangoFsh Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Student General Artist
^^
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