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Lay down, silly little boy
Close your eyes, foolish child
Did you really feel special?
Did you truly think, you were different?

Stand up, silly little toy
Open your eyes, troublesome gnat
Look into the shattered mirror
Watch the salty rain run wild

Do you see silly, little, tool?
With your hideous eyes, stupid kid
Your worth has burnt in fire
See the pathetic pile of ash?

Such a smart, silly, little brat
Such an understanding, foolish, rat
You can see your end is near
Why not speed things up;

Silly, little, boy?
This is a very deep poem I wrote today that hurt me to write. I tired hard on this but not really sure how it turned on.. Hope you like
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NaokoElric2250 Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really do fell like a child while reading this.
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thelonelywolf678 Nov 2, 2013  Student Writer
Why is that, and is that a bad or good thing?
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NaokoElric2250 Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, it is a good thing, as you are invoking emotion. And well, it just reminds you of what some parents think about the thoughts or opinions of children. Thought, now I'm guessing it's a metaphor?
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thelonelywolf678 Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
Ohhh, okay, thank makes since
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NaokoElric2250 Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Is that good?
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thelonelywolf678 Nov 8, 2013  Student Writer
Yes, I think so
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StellaStarfish Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so sad but at the same time so lovely... :heart:
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thelonelywolf678 Nov 1, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you <3
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anila73 Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. The uncomfortable effect of this poem tainted with insanity is powerful. Love it.
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thelonelywolf678 Nov 1, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you, I put a lot of power into this one and am glad it showed
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